基础英语写作记叙文1.ppt

基础写作训练-记叙文 基础写作讲评 假如你在春节期间到北京大学参加了一个为期十天的冬令营活动。以下是你参加本次活动期间所写的部分日记摘要。 [写作内容] 你拟向一英文杂志“我与奥运”栏目投稿，请根据日记内容写一篇短文介绍本次活动的内容及你的感受。 你的稿件需包括以下五方面的内容： 1.本次活动的概况（名称、时间、地点）； 2.介绍校内活动的内容； 3.介绍校外活动的内容； 4.概述你对本次活动的总体感受； 5.你对本次活动的建议并阐述原因。[写作要求] 1.只能使用5个句子表达全部内容； 2.文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。[评分标准] 句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。 [试题分析] 学生习作分析 存在问题：主要在语言表达方面。 1.时态错误 2.单词短语错误 3.有些句型用的比较好，如not only…but also; because ;which 定语从句；so that.但整体读起来仍然让人感觉比较平淡 短语复习 在春节期间 为期十天的冬令营活动 关于奥运会历史的讲座 有点闷,枯燥 体育场 大十倍 开阔视野 户外活动 句型修改 1. During the spring festival I attended a ten -day winter camp in Beijing University. 2.We listened to a lecture on the history of Olympic history and had English lessons. 3.The lecture was boring, but I feel very happy because it broaden my horizons. 4.I also hope that there are more outdoor activities so that we can know more about Beijing. 句型增分修改 1. During the spring festival I attended a ten -day winter camp at Beijing University.（It is/was…that..强调句型） 2.We listened to a lecture on the history of Olympic history and had English lessons.（not only…but also…倒装句型） 3.The lecture was boring, but I feel very happy because it broaden my horizon.（形容词+as+主语+谓语， 倒装句） 4.I also hope that there are more outdoor activities so that we can know more about Beijing.（被动语态） 修改后的作文 It was in Beijing University that I attended a ten-day winter camp during the spring festival. Not only did we listen to a lecture on Olympic Games History but also had English lessons. How excited I was when we visited a new sports stadium, which is ten times bigger than our school! Generally speaking, boring as the lecture was, I enjoyed myself because most of the activities were interesting and they broadened my horizons. Finally, I do hope that more outdoor activities should be organized so that we can know more about Beijing. 小结 1.如何写好基础写作记叙文 2.基础写作记叙文的写法(篇章特点) 总结 记叙文主要是记叙所发生的事情和经历。常见的形式有：故事、日记、新闻报道、游记等 基础写作记叙文注意事项 记叙文常用句型补充 1.)no sooner…than…=hardly/scarcely…