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雅思高分作文的四大要素及范文 　　Task Response 　　Coherence and Cohesion 　　Lexical Resource 　　Grammatical Range and Accuracy 　　雅思的4Gates就是其评分标准，分别为“内容”，“逻辑结构”，“语法的准确使用和范围”以及“词汇量”四个标准。根据下面的全面修改案例，读者可以清楚的看到一篇5.5分的雅思范文是如何在修改之前蜕变成为高分作品。Cambridge 8 – Test 2 　　Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed becauseof technology. 　　In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships peoplemake? 　　Has this become a positive or negative development? 　　原文： 　　Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because oftechnology. 　　Yes, the technology has changed the people’s interaction in very enhancedmanner. Earlier people use to wait and try to find easy way to contact theirfriends or relatives leaving far. In past there was no quick technology tocontact or to establish any communication between one person to another person.The drawback with past communication systems was that it were very slow and weretime taking process such as telegrams, letter etc. People used to afraid towrite their personal feedbacks or things to their love ones due to insecuremedium of communication. When it comes to professional level, the privacy andaccuracy should be maintain but, to that time there were no securecommunications. 　　Now the things have changed around, people from far distance contact theirloves one in an easy and quick ways which improves the interaction level betweentwo person. Quality the level of the interaction between people to people, hasimproved because the people are equipped with high-tec technology which enhancesthe communication. There are many many medium which are available now such asinternet, called cards etc. 　　The technology has provided the mobility faster which help people to talkor to interact at any time anywhere in the world. 　　People can contact their friend or relatives any time they want. It hasbecome so easier and feriendly to be in touch with your feriends, relatives evenwith the unknown people. 　　原文翻译： 　　今天，由于科技的发展人们相互交流的方式也发生了变化