浅谈澹化雅思文章模板痕迹之双边结构写作.docVIP

浅谈淡化雅思文章模板痕迹 之双边结构写作 朗阁海外考试研究中心前言 在上篇文章中，我们分析了对单边结构文章做淡化模板痕迹处理。在这篇文章，着重分析如何消除双边结构的模板痕迹。众所周知，双边结构主要有两个方面的特征：考题文字中的观点双向和考生对观点支持角度的双边讨论，但最好不模棱两可，应该有明确的单一指向性的观点倾向。 同样地，对于判断作文的结构类型，应该不是大的问题，我们关心的是，考生太过依赖所谓的模板，而使得文章没有灵活度，否则，期望通过所谓捷径来快速取得理想的分数往往会适得其反。 本文主要通过分析双边结构类型作文中比较常见的话题，为考生分析如何淡化写作中的模板痕迹，使文章更为灵活。分析 真题链接：In some countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion. 以上是剑桥中的考试真题，相信大家都已经非常熟悉。我们就一起结合此题，对双边结构的整体文章结构和遣词造句做一个简单对比。 1. 引言段 引言段是通篇作文的开篇之作，对于它的写法多种多样。但是无论怎样书写，切忌出现以下模式性的语句样式： 模板语言： Nowadays, the discussion about ……is a very controversial one. Those who criticize……. argue that……, but people who advocate……, on the other hand, maintain that…… 这样的模板相信大家不会陌生，它曾经受到无数考生青睐。但是我们说过，这样过于机械的语言，很难体现出考生对考题文字的理解，更为糟糕的是，你的开头有可能和无数人是重复的！ 下面我们就做一个简单的对比： 非模板语言： No matter in which country, children are, without any exception, regarded as the protected in society, not to mention making them involved in any forms of paid-work（调用背景知识，引出话题）. The necessity of allowing them to make money with their own hands is indeed worth discussing（结合对考题文字的统一转换，自然流露双边讨论倾向） 2. 主体段模板语言： 1. The benefits of…… can be perceived in many aspects. In the first place, 分论点一. For instance, 例证 / 语言论证。In the second place, 分论点二. 论证. 2. However, ……has also given rise to a lot of problems. For one thing,……For another……, Finally,…… 在传统的模板里，双边结构的主体段只是简单地分段论证两方面的观点，虽然将两种对立观点展现的非常清晰，但是也难免落入模式化的俗套。 做一个简单的对比： 非模板语言： a. 让步分析 Admittedly, hardship and bitterness of life could drive people to become mature. Under working pressure, children think about finishing their tasks before the deadline instead of concerning how to kill their seemingly limitless free time. Work may be the only priority of their life. It is fairly different between taking a dollar from their parents and earning one by themselves. Only the tough reality can force them