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最高分23，最低分12 8班：张高歌 卢安邦 房育芝 陈楠 徐勤枫 田倍乐 张路莹 吴笑笑 谷雨 杨玉轩 李洋 鲁丹 李乔楚 马震 岳壮 袁帅 袁甜 1班：陈甜甜 袁柱柱 马田 马子童 宗若雨 何欣 顾雨薇 李洁 吕赛男 邵孟 马志 王源淙 程龙 张惠雨 李东泽 邓小翔 彭紫萱 魏嘉琪 马伸铜 张谨 优点：要点齐全；字数符合要求; 自己的建议合理 缺点：漫画描述不太准确； 语法、词汇错误有点多； 语言表达不够高级；书写不够美观大方 1. 保证三要素－体裁、人称、时态正确 体裁：议论文 人称：第三人称 时态：一般现在时 ２. 一些常见错误 1)误解图意 2)不明寓意 3)中心不明 ３. 控制字数 Just as the cartoon shows clearly, the mother who sees that her son can handle the present weight wants to add some weight in the hope of letting him learn more. However, her son sweating all over suffers a lot because of the pressure brought by the guidance materials. It concerns us tightly that the children will break down one day. The cartoon points out a very common but serious phenomenon in our society. Too much emphasis has been attached to guidance materials which are believed to be beneficial to children’s study. On one hand, no one can deny the constructive role that guidance materials play in students’ learning. On the other hand, no man can be physically healthy with only one kind of nutrient and no bird can fly high with one wing. Therefore, no mind can grow into a full one with the single help of guidance materials. Recognizing problems is the first step in finding a method. Then all parties concerned, parents, educators, and the government should work out effective measures to stop the situation and relieve the children of the pressure. 仔细审题 准确立义 规范行文 整洁书写 language Does the writer use any linking words? Is there any advanced vocabulary? Are there any good sentence patterns? ⑴Because the weather was good, our journey was comfortable. our journey was comfortable. ⑵We all think he is a great man. ⑶Suddenly I thought out a good idea. 　 Thanks to the good weather, We all think highly of him. A good idea occurred to me. A good idea suddenly struck me. 一. 学会使用高级词汇 ⑷When she heard he had died, she went pale with sorrow.