英语四级作文话解析.doc

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic The Moonlight Clan. You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline given in Chinese below: 1 现在很多年轻人每个月都把自己赚的钱花光，他们被称作“月光族” 2 有人认为这是一种时尚的消费观念，但很多人反对这样消费 3 我对此的看法是…… The Moonlight Clan _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ 行文思路 本题属于提纲式文字命题。提纲第1点指出一种现象，提纲第2点针对该现象提出两种不同的观点，提纲第3点要求谈谈“我”的看法，由此可判断本文应为对比选择型作文。 根据所给提纲，本文应包含如下内容：描述“月光族”现象，引出对这一现象的不同看法;对比阐述两种看法各自的理由;表明“我”对“月光族”的看法并说明理由。 高分范文 The Moonlight Clan Nowadays, more and more people, [1]especially the young are joining in the army of “the moonlight clan”. These people exhaust their earnings every month without any savings. [2]Many people think this is a fashionable life style, [2]while more other people object to this kind of consumption style. [3]Those who support “the moonlight clan” think that those people know how to enjoy life and have a higher life quality. [3]However, more other people criticize “the moonlight clan”. They say that the consumption habit of “the moonlight clan” is unhealthy and sometimes wasteful. In addition, no savings will [4]place “the moonlight clan” in a difficult position [5]in case of unexpected expenses. 　　[6]Weighing these two arguments, I prefer to the latter one. In my eyes, [7]though “the moonlight clan” may acquire temporary satisfaction from their consumption, [8]in the long term, it [9]is unfavorable to their family and career. [10]Just as a proverb says, one should always prepare for a rainy day. 【亮点点评】 [1]“尤其，特别”。 [2]用于提出两种对立观点。 [3]用于引出两种对立观点各自的理由。 [4]“使…处于艰难的境地”。 [5]“以防，万一”。 [6]用于表明“我”的倾向。 [7]though引导让步状语从句。 [8]“从长远来看”。 [9]“对…不利”。 [10]引用谚语结尾，值得借鉴。 佳句临摩 1.佳句：Many people think this is a fashionable life style, while more other people object to this kind of c