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* * Write a concise passage use few words express clear meaning Tom is four years old and he is energetic. One day a bike was given to him. The bike is new and it is a light blue in color. Tom received the bike for his birthday. He struggled to ride his bike. He struggled for two hours. However, he was unsuccessful in riding the bike. Compare the two passages Four-year-old Tom is energetic. One day, he got a light blue bike for his birthday. He struggled for two hours to ride it, but he was unsuccessful. Tom is four years old and he is energetic. One day a bike was given to him. The bike is new and it is a light blue in color. Tom received the bike for his birthday. He struggled to ride his bike. He struggled for two hours. However, he was unsuccessful in riding the bike . Outstanding Concise(best) wordy better Improve the wordy sentence(I) 1. There are many People hunting animals for living in the mountain 2.A girl likes Chinese food better. 3. The employee with anger quarreled with his boss. 4.In the not too far future, our dreams will come true. 5.He gave up school on condition of the reason that it was necessary for him to support his family. (angry) (prefer) (hunters) (near) (because) Summary one : change phrasesinto single words improve the wordy sentence(II) 1.His family live in a village which is near a river 2.The house, which was newly built is very large. 3.People who are interested in the job must send your resume to our company before Friday. 4.We will have the party in the garden which is on the top of the main building. 5.While he is waiting for the bus, he always recites texts. (The newly-built house is very large) (People interested in the job must send your resume to our company before Friday.) (We will have the party in the garden on the top of the main building.) (While waiting for the bus or Waiting for…) (His family live in a village near a river) Summa