chapter 3.4 conciseness.ppt

Effective sentences conciseness Conciseness Discuss the following questions with your partner and try to answer the questions below. What is conciseness? What is conciseness? Conciseness in writing means making your writing ________ but _________. To use only the necessary words, or as few words as possible so long as the meaning_____________________________ Unnecessary words only _________ the idea. Conciseness - Examples How to achieve conciseness? 1)Cutting unnecessary repetition Wordy: Many unskilled workers without training in a particular job are unemployed and do not have any work. Concise: Many unskilled workers are unemployed. Wordy: He was assassinated and killed. Concise: He was assassinated. 1)Cutting unnecessary repetition Cooperate together Few in number Large in size Final completion Important essentials Cooperate together Few in number Large in size Final completion Important essentials The main word already implies the underlined word or words. 2)Cutting or shortening empty words and phrases Wordy: I came to college because of many factors, but most of all because of the fact that I want a career in medicine. Revised: I came to college mainly because I want a career in medicine. 2) shortening empty words and phrases for the reason that due to the fact that because of the fact that by virtue of the fact that because 1)In my opinion, I think young people do not ignore traditional festivals while celebrating western festivals. 2)In my opinion, young people do not ignore traditional festivals while celebrating western festivals. 3)Young people do not ignore traditional festivals while celebrating western festivals. Exercise 23 Page 72 There are twenty-five students who have already expressed a desire to attend the program next summer. It is they and their parents who stand to gain the most by the government grant. Twenty-five students have already expressed a desire to attend the program next summer. They and their parents