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Exercises: 把下列每一组句子改写成一个简洁的句子。按需要,使用本节中提出的几种方法，例： He was taking some exercise in the park. Then several thugs suddenly appeared ahead in his path． He was exercising(or jogging or strolling)in the park when several thugs suddenly loomed in his path． 1．Chewing gum was originally introduced to the United States by Antonio Lopez de Santa Anna. He was the Mexican general． 2．After he had been defeated by the Texans in 1845, the general, who was exiled, made the choice to settle in New York． 3．A piece of chicle had been stashed by the general in his baggage. Chicle is the dried milky sap of the Mexican sapodilla tree． 4．There was more of this resin brought into the country by Santa Anna’s friend Thomas Adams．Adams had a plan to make rubber． 5．The plan failed．Then Adams had occasion to get a much more successful idea on the basis of the use to which the resin was put by General Santa Anna．That is, Adams decided to make a gum that could be chewed 2.4 改写专门用语 专门用语(jargon)指的是一种含糊不清的、华而不实的语言，过分复杂，甚至让人无法理解。 当对主题没有把握或者思想混乱时，人们可能会写出这样的文字，但是在修改和订正时，应理清思路，去掉这类文字。 下面两个句子就是用这种文字写出来的，真是令人费解： The necessity for individuals to become separate entities in their own fight may impel children to engage in open rebelliousness against parental authority or against sibling influence．with resultant confusion of those being rebelled against. The weekly social gatherings stimulate networking among themselves of management from various divisions, with the aim of developing contacts and maximizing the flow of creative information. 用简洁的文字来表达，上面两句的意思很可能是： Children’s natural desire to become themselves may make them rebel against bewildered parents or siblings. The weekly parties give managers from different divisions a chance to meet and to share ideas. 改写下列语篇,去掉不必要的或重复的词语,简化词语和语法 At the end of a lengthy line of reasoning, he came to the conclusion that the situation with carcinogens (cancer—causing substances) should be regarded as similar to the situation with the automobile．Rather tha