[高中作文公开课讲评.ppt

作文讲评 作文较好的同学（18分以上） 谢勤 杨乐 韩笑 汪文慧 请思考 为什么第二篇语言不比第一篇差，但分数却低得多呢？ 第一篇字迹清楚，卷面整洁。 第一篇由于用了较多的连接词每段内的条理更清楚，一目了然。 第一篇段落分得很清楚，而第二篇最后一段…… 避免常用单词拼写错误 communicat oppinion truely mordern enjoies massage monther paly a children childrens slove lifes communicate opinion truly modern enjoys message mother play A child children solve lives 忽视词性,错误严重 wide our horizon we can chatting As the time going by ignore the communicate with their parents share theirs opinion It is not benefit to our study widen our horizon we can chat With the time going by As the time goes by …the communication … share their opinion It is not beneficial to our study 句式错误千奇百怪 The boy is playing the computer doesn’t want to talk with his mother. The boy who is playing/playing the computer … Many students are addicted to chatting online ignore the significance of communicating with their parents. Many students who are addicted/addicted to chatting online… Lots of teenagers would rather playing computer games than talking with their parents. Lots of teenagers would rather play computer games than talk with their parents. Talking with our parents is important, it can help us communicate with each other better. Talking with our parents is important, which can help us communicate with each other better Be faced with these problems, I think we teenagers should talk with our parents as much as possible. Faced with these problems, I think we teenagers should talk with our parents as much as possible. 中式英语笑话百出 We can’t ignore our parents’ good. Our parents eat more salt than we. Let them know our mind has what thought. If you don’t want to face to face communicate with your parents… There is generation gap exists in most families. Compared with computer, parents are more important. 句子拖沓 We should communicate with our parents more and more. It can help us know our parents more and more. It also can help our parents know us more and more. When his mother wants to talk with him, what he says is that “Can’t