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2015届初三上英语单元考试优秀作文选一 101-102 题目：你对你现在居住的城市（乡村）满意吗？请从环境、人口等方面，说说你理想中的家园。（80词左右） 初三1班 黄润萍 I live in a beautiful city, Quanzhou. My city has a long history and many places of interest. However, I am not pleased with it. The natural environments are becoming worse and worse because of the pollution in Quanzhou. I dream about a home like this: first, it is close to nature and surrounded by trees. Second, it has a population of 500. People are friendly to each other like a big family. Last, people can be careful with garbage and discourage cutting trees to protect the environment. I believe my dream will come true in the future. Do you want to live in my dream home? 教师点评：1、本篇文章条理清晰，巧用过渡句：“I dream about a home like this”。 主次分明，结构合理，紧扣题目要求，更多地描述自己理想中的家园。 初三2班 杨浩 I live in Quanzhou, a small city in Fujian Province. Thanks to the excellent public transportation, it is very convenient for people to live in such a small city. So I am quite satisfied with the living conditions in my city. But it is true that there are many problems in my city. So I dream that I can live in a quiet city. The environment should be much better. For instance, the trees and grass had better cover over 20% of the city. What’s more, the population there should never be too large or too small so that the traffic will not be heavy and I won’t feel lonely. If there is a city like this, I will be quite happy to live there in the future. 教师点评：1、本篇文章行文流畅，很好地利用所学知识阐述自己的观点。 善于运用一些复合句，关联词语，使文章显得更加充实和丰满。 C三3班 林滟雯 I live in a beautiful coast city called Quanzhou. It has already become good, ①but I expect more. ②In my opinion, a really great city should be like this. There is no pollution, just blue sky hugs the whole city with green grass everywhere. The population of the city isn’t too large or too small. The traffic isn’t busy, so there won’t be crazy situations in rush hours. Every person here is nice and friendly and they always smile with satisfaction. That’s what I have in mind. I