2012.3月考作文[寻找雷锋—小鸡学游泳.ppt

3月月考情景作文;情景作文 假设你是红星中学高二（1）班的学生李华。最近你班组织了一次活动，寻找身边的雷锋。请根据下图提示将此次活动情况记录下来，并以“Looking for Lei Feng”为题向你校英语报刊投稿。 注意：1．文章题目已为你写好。 2．词数不少于60。 Looking for Lei Feng ;审题: 1.文体: 记叙文 2.时态: 一般过去时; 一般现在时，现在完成时; 3.人称: 第一人称 4.内容要点： 1. 走出学校寻找雷锋（相机、小组） 2. 在街上看到献血车处很多人在等候献血(拍照、感受) 3. 在街上还看到有人在帮助残疾人下台阶 在公共汽车上看到有人给老年人让座位 4. 办“寻找身边的雷锋”宣传墙报 5. 对此次活动的感受;问题： 1.审题：looking for Lei Feng（8分） 2.语言错误 词性：kind—kindness without hesitate—without hesitation 名词：an old people—an old person/man/woman help a bind—help a blind man 搭配：the reason of…—the reason for… devote/contribute blood—donate blood 连接：first—at first ;3.无效细节：help them clean the room also take a picture for the people trying to protect the environment 丢落细节：让座, 拍照，做图片宣传栏 4. 时态：混用 5. There be 句式： There was a blind man went downstairs – 6. 反复重复使用同一个动词或同一个句式 find— see, notice, spot, note, witness, come across, catch sight of, meet with, take notice of ;;Language bank: leave the school with cameras in our hands go out of our school, camera in hand by threes and twos On Friday afternoon, we left after school in twos and threes, heading for the street, cameras in hand. On Thursday morning, my classmates and I set out from school with our cameras so that we could take photos of what we would see. Early in the morning, my classmates and I stepped out of our campus, each of us with a camera hanging around our necks, and started our activity. ;Language bank: blood donor n. 献血者 donate blood to a blood bank向血库献血 a blood donation bus 献血车 wait in line for their turn to denote their blood queue to get on the donation bus to give their blood At first we came across/saw/noticed a blood donation bus, a long line of volunteers waiting for their turn to donate. Touched, we took pictures. At first we passed by a blood donation spot where many a person was in line. Deeply moved by their spir