雅思范文解析-食品.docx

智课网IELTS备考资料 雅思范文解析：食品 摘要： 以下是关于“食品”话题的一篇雅思范文及对它的经典解析。雅思作文中，为了防止多数同学写偏题，大家应该首先把题目中的内容性实词画出，只要这些词在文中出现并是论述的核心  Question:  Food can be produced cheaper if we use improved fertilizers and better machinery.  However some methods may be dangerous for human health, and may have negative effects for local communities.  What is your opinion?  （注意标红的部分： 雅思 作文中，为了防止多数同学写偏题，大家应该首先把题目中的内容性实词画出，只要这些词在文中出现并是论述的核心，你的结构性分数就会上去。）  中文自写提纲：  观点一：化肥+农机= 食品 制造成本降低  观点二：化肥+农机=损害健康，危害社区  观点三：支持观点二  建议  A，管制化肥  B，寻找新化肥  C，改进农机  （用中文写提纲的好处：思路清楚，反应快。写到后面时，提纲可能会有微小变动，但大部分不能变动，否则一定会偏题。）  agriculture has become one key word in the global debate of environmental issues. some hold that improved fertilisers combined with better machinery will amount to a significant reduction in costs of producing food, while others contend that negative impacts will also ensue on human health and on local communities.  （首句：可以从大面开始分析，切忌照抄题目，会被扣分。）  （首段结构：仅提出双方观点即可，可以简单写自己观点，也可以不写。记住，雅思作文贵在“不说一句废话”。）  the former school （类别） of thought stands on the ground that improved fertilizers and better machinery will increase productivity. fertilizers boost the capacity of each inch of ground to churn out crops, and machinery boost the capacity of man to harvest them. and according to the theories of economy of scale, overall cost for each kilogram of crops will correspondingly decrease.  （这个段落层层递进，目标只有一个：reduction of costs）  the second school has its point, though. fertilizers are unnatural products made of special chemicals. while these chemicals may enhance the productivity of the soil, they may also mutate the chemical make-up of the plants, either by affecting their genetic formation, or by getting themselves absorbed into the plants. the residues will remain in the food all the way to mans stomach. this will, of course, affect our health.  （首句：建议中间段落的