2009福建高中考英语作文写作指导〔iwanttosmile〕.ppt

2009福建 某英语报社拟成立“微笑俱乐部”，现征募会员。要求申请者提交一篇题为“I want to Smile”的英语短文。请你以申请者的身份，根据以下思路图的提示用英语写一篇短文。 注意： 根据思路图适当展开，以使行文连贯； 词数：120左右 优点:（比较上次书面表达） 1.语句优美，情感真挚，体现出积极、健康的情感态度价值观。 2.能分层次分段落写，并用上适当的连词。 3.能尽量用学过的词组和句型表达（如：倒装句，强调句，表建议的虚拟句，定语从句，非谓语等) 4.卷面书写涂改或潦草现象减少。 缺点： 1.少数同学离题，写成“父母朋友对自己的微笑” 2.为了刻意写出高级表达，但却出现太多毛病（如：一些低级的单词拼写错误、名词的可数与不可数、词性变化，主谓一致，一个句子同时有多个谓语） 3.还存在许多中式英语（主要是直接翻译过来）。 常见错误： Smiling make us closely. (x) ----Smiling makes us close. (√) If everybody smiles everyday, the world will be a better place. (x) ----If everybody smiles every day(√) I should smile at myself. If we do it, we will be happy and able to deal with any problem in our lives. (人称不对，夸大作用) We should smile at ourselves. If we smile more, we will feel happier and more confident. (√) Life is not as smoothly as that we expect.(词性不对、句型错误) Life is not as smooth as we expected. (√) Smile at my parents can let my family become harmony. (句子成分不对，词性错误) Smiling at my parents can let my family become harmonious. If there is no smile, the world will be a terrible world. (可用虚拟语气) If there were no smile, the world would lose most of the joy. Only we smile can we be more optimistic. (倒装句用错) Only if we smile can we be more optimistic. No matter happy or depressed, we can smile. (句型错误) Whether happy or depressed, we can smile. 要点1. advantages of smiling Pattern: There are various advantages of smiling. / Advantages of smiling can be listed as follows. Not only can it …, but also it can … So I want to smile. Smile is like a bridge between you and me. Smiling can promote the relationship between people and make our hearts closer. Smiling is a universal language, which is widely used throughout the world to spread friendliness, happiness and love. 要点2. smile at parents or friends; why? I want to smile at my parents, without whose help I wouldn’t have had such a bright future; I want to smile at my friends, who always comfort me when I’m upset. 要点2. smile at parents or friends; wh