从英语文章中吸取精华.docVIP

以此帖献给那些写作文不会从别人文章中吸取精华的DDMM们(这篇NCE4的文章的语言其实远远超过了高考的难度，但我拿它作例子，为的不仅仅是应试，更想介绍一种学习写作的方法.重点看分析，那是你们需要思考、改进、积累的地方……) The quiet life of the country has never appealed to me(第一句清楚的称述自己的观点,但是没有用模版式的agree or disagree或者I like, I do not like之类的). City born and city bred(经典句子,作文的highlight,在别的地方同样可以移植类似的结构), I have always regarded(避免了使用think这样的词汇,以后大家要写think的时候,就用regard as) the country as something you look at through a train window(细节的具象化), or something you occasionally(副词的使用充分的表达作者的感情和限定成分,同时避免了sometimes这种相对常见的使用) visit during the weekend. Most of my friends live in the city, yet they always go into raptures at the mere mention of the country(超强的句子!go into rapture,这里用一个很动感的短语表现了friend的狂喜,同时使用了always和mere两个词构成鲜明的对比,表达很生动!). Though they extol the virtues(赞美的高级说法,用一个3词的短语替代一个格的praise,不仅在字数上多了,而且表达更好) of the peaceful life, only one of hem has ever gone to live in the country and he was back in town within(within虽然不是什么高级的东西,但是大家常常忘记用,或者根本没有用within的意识) six months. Even he still lives under the illusion(under the illusion活在幻想之下,这个短语本身就很好,同时,大家在写作时也可以用:a multitude of people live under the illusion that A is superior to B, however, from my perspective…) that country life is somehow superior to town life(somehow也是好词!当你要说有的人荒谬的观点时,就可以说:why some deem A as the optimal choice and somehow superior to B is really beyond me.). He is forever talking(be forever doing,当强调一个动作的时候,这是很好的,be doing比一个单一的do来的强烈得多) about the friendly people, the clean atmosphere(atmosphere的使用避免的用俗了的environment), the closeness to nature and the gentle pace(gentle pace, gentle完美的形容了乡村生活,准确而生动的形容词使用) of living. Nothing can be compared(又学到了,无与伦比的说法,在表达自己肯定的观点的时候可以使用), he maintains, with the first cockcrow, the twittering of birds at dawn, the sight of the rising sun glinting on the trees and pastures. This idyllic pastoral scene is only part of the picture(only part of the picture,仅仅是问题的一个方面,这个短语是很常用的!). My friend fails to mention(这里用fail to do替代了does not do,因为does not do实在太低级了,而fail to do则是好很多) the long and friendless(