2013届高三英语书面表达专题指导、练讲及习作评析(第三部分考场习作评析).ppt

试题来源：江苏省石庄高级中学2013届高三学情调研检测 请根据下列两幅图写一篇短文。 注意：1.描述图片内容。描述时要注意图中人物的表情； 2.谈谈你对此漫画的感受和观点； 3.写作时要适当地发挥，语言连贯； 4.词数：150左右。 【考场习作】 (1)Education, which has always been a hot topic, plays a very important role in today’s world .(2)But not every parent knows how to educate their children correctly. (3)As is shown in the first picture, when a little girl fell down, a little boy wanted to help her. (4)But his mother prevented him and said, “You can’t, otherwise someone else would say that it was you that knock her off.” (5)However, in the second picture, an oil bottle fell down and the mother criticized angrily the little boy didn’t straighten the bottle up. (6)He yelled, “If I did that, you would say the bottle was broken by me.” (7)From my point of view, what the mother did was wrong. (8)As we all know, parents are children’s first teachers. (9)Therefore, I think parents should not only care for their childrens health, but their minds. (10)In addition, they should let their children know its a pleasure to help others who are in trouble. 【习作评析】 在评析考生考场习作之前，先让我们来看一看该书面表达的最基本的要点是什么。 1.认真看图，结合文字和图画，确立所要表达的主题是： 一些家长不懂得如何正确教育孩子或不好的家庭教育的范例； 2.小男孩要去帮助跌倒的小女孩，妈妈阻止儿子去扶摔倒的女孩,并对儿子说：“不要扶，否则人家会 说是你把她碰倒的。” 3.妈妈看到儿子对于倒了的油瓶置之不理；小男孩对妈妈说： “我扶了，你会说是我碰倒的”妈妈很是震惊（愤怒）。 4.我对漫画中母亲的做法看法以及我的建议。 【习作的亮点】 全文共10句160字。要点表达齐全，较好地完成了题目所规定的任务。阅卷老师判分为21分（满分为25分）。 1.习作根据作者自身水平较多使用了复合句。尤其是虚拟语气和强调句（... “You can’t, otherwise someone else would say that it was you that knock her off.” “If I did that, you would say the bottle was broken by me.”）的运用，更是增加了文章的可读性。显示了作者的较为扎实的基本功。 2.习作注意了过渡词、过渡句的使用。如第三段中： (9)Therefore, I think parents should not only care for their childrens health, but their minds. (10)In addition, they should let their children know its a pleasure to help others who are in trouble. (7)From my point of view, what the mother did was wrong. (8)As we all know, parents are children’s first teachers. 这样的运用使得文章表达连贯； 3.习作对主题（Education, which has always been a hot topic, plays a very important role in