关于怎样写开发信的方法及实例介绍.doc

（一）关于怎样写开发信的方法及实例介绍 1. 看下面实例来看信件写法不同效果完全不同。 举个例子吧，我以前招助理的时候，会考他们的email水平，我把中文意思告诉他们，然后让他们用英文来模拟一封邮件。 told. I’ll give you reply as soon as we get the offer from the Please give them some more time to re-check the price, factory. It will take several days. Please be more patient. because the material is different from the past orders. But they also told me, the raw material increased these However, the material was increased very quickly! days. Could you please confirm the price quickly after Therefore, please kindly place the order soon if the price you get it? We’ll purchase the raw material and do the is ok for you! We’ll do production asap. production immediately! Thank you in advance! Looking forward to your reply. Thank you! Kind regards, Best regards, Tommy Jenny 这封呢？我个人觉得比上一封号一点，毕竟主动和被这封邮件写得好么？老实说还可以，虽然主动语态和动语态结合，“We”只出现了一次，不算太枯燥。内容人称多了点，但是内容都点到了，表达也算通顺，用也稍微简单了一点，点到位了。最重要的是，他把的词汇也都是挺简单的，不难懂。但是不是有点啰嗦？purchase the raw material去掉了，直接用“We’ll do 如果能简单一点，是不是更好？我们看看第二位应聘the production asap.”这样更简洁，毕竟你要生产，者写的email： 能不采购原材料么？所以这是废话。缺点是，我个人 感觉还是啰嗦了一点。 我会这样写： Hi Mike, Samples received and already passed to vendor. The material was PP, not ABS. Offer sheet is preparing and will be sent to you soon. By the way, raw material increased these days, pls make a decision quickly to go ahead after price confirmed. We’ll arrange the mass production asap. Thanks and best regards, C 几句话点到主题，表达清楚就可以了。能用一句话表达的，千万不写两句，省掉一切能省的废话。写完以后其实可以读一遍，看哪句话可以删掉，哪句话可以换一种表达方式，少用第一人称，多用被动语态！等到你重新检查的时候，发现已经简单的不能再简单，没词可以删了，那就点“发送”吧~~ 2. 写邮件时常犯的错误： ? 喜欢插入URL链接语气过于生硬。 ? 邮件写得过长。 附上：老外写的开发信 ? 没有明确的主题。 ? 长篇大论的公司或工厂介绍 Hey guy, ? 爱炫耀英文水平。 ? 喜欢用奇奇怪怪的字体 XYZ trading here, exporting LANTERNS with ? 主动语态用得太多。 ? 经常会问一些毫无意义的话（开发信还是要直接一点，告诉客人你是谁，你做什么，你的优势在那里。只要清楚表述出这3点，就完全足够了。其他的东西可以以后慢慢谈。） ? 喜欢用附件和图片 3. 开发信案例分析 1）某人写的： Dear sirs: From the internet, we get your company name. What I want is just to see that if we have the chance to cooperation in the near future or not. We are a factory of fibe