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写作举例误区 数据 1. 捏造 2. 无法注明 Recent studies indicate that the moisture content of the atmosphere is 10 per cent higher today than it was 20 years ago. 改：The moisture content of the atmosphere has appeared to be higher today than it was 20 years ago. The number of people smoking has increased to as high as 65 per cent in China. 改：The number of people smoking has increased at an alarming rate in China. Eighty per cent of smokers begins early in life. 改：Most smokers begin early in life. 自己或朋友的生活经历 1. 个人不代表整体，缺乏说服力 2. 第一人称的使用会削弱文章的正式性 解决方法：个人改成整体，个别写成普遍 I used to indulge in computer games, which directly led to my school failure. 改：Children who have been indulging in computer games seem to have a higher likelihood of school failure. Kevin, a friend of mine, smoke a lot and finally died of cancer. 改：Heavy smokers are more likely to die of cancer or other diseases than non-smokers. My father spent much of his lifetime working for the same company and was granted many rewards. 改：Working for the same company throughout one’s career life will enable him or her to gain many rewards. 报纸关于一个事件的报道或调查 1. 个体不代表整体，缺乏说服力 2. 有捏造的嫌疑 解决办法：个体变整体，个别变普遍 I read a news report days ago describing how a single parent struggles. 改：There are many reports describing single parents’ struggling to survive. A survey indicates that family background plays a part in one’s life development. 改：There is much evidence to show that family background plays a part in one’s life development. 中国式的例子 1. 一个国家不代表整体 2. 过分使用一个国家的例子，会引起反感 解决方法：要么把中国当作一个特例，要么把中国的情况当成许多国家的情况 Many factories in China dispose industrial waste without any preliminary treatment. 改：Many factories around the world, especially those in developing countries, dispose industrial waste without any preliminary treatment. Many children in China are raised being spoilt by their parents and misbehaved. 改：Children who misbehave are normally those who have been spoilt by their parents. * *