2015届二模作文_感谢信.ppt

* 2015届高三英语二模 应用文讲评 * 你刚刚从美国游学归来，请你给美国朋友Chris写一封信，内容包括： 1. 告知旅途顺利，你安全到家； 2. 感谢他们一家对你寄宿期间的悉心照顾; 3. 邀请他今年暑假来北京游览，你提供食宿。 第一节 （15分） 一、评分原则 1．本题总分15分，按4个档次给分。 2．评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言质量初步确定其档次，然后以档次的要求来衡量，确定或降低档次，最后给分。 3．评分时应考虑：内容是否完整，条理是否清楚，交际是否得体，语言是否准确。 4．拼写、标点符号或书写影响内容表达时，应视其影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可以接受。 5．词数少于50，从总分中减去1分。 二、内容要点 1. 告知旅途顺利，你安全到家； 2. 感谢他们一家对你寄宿期间的悉心照顾; 3. 邀请他今年暑假来北京游览，你提供食宿。 三、语言 (今天讲评的重点) 通过审题确定语言风格： 你刚刚从美国游学归来，请你给美国朋友Chris 写一封信，内容包括： 写信的对象----你的朋友Chris 语言风格-----informal (非正式信件) ----感谢信 * 好的书信，语言有什么特点呢？ 官方范文（14分） I had a pleasant journey back from America and I just arrived home safe. I want to thank you and your family for taking such good care of me during my time in America. I would like to return the favour and invite you to come sightseeing in Beijing this summer. You would also be welcome to stay at my home during the visit. I hope to hear from you soon.  * 一起欣赏我们的一类文吧 学习好的语言 * 1. 简洁明了；不罗嗦 2. 交际得体；表达委婉 14.5 分 * 101词 * 13.5 分 3. 表达准确、灵活转换 怎么表达“提供食宿”呢？ * 语言积累素材 1. 回家的旅途非常顺利，我已安全到家。 ----I have already got back home safe and sound. Everything was fine during the flight. ----My trip back home was all fine and Im now at home. ----The journey back home was alright and I have returned home safely. * * ---Im writing to inform you that I have arrived home safely after a pleasant journey 语言挺好的，但是作为这篇作文的开头是否很适合呢？ 改成这样的开头是否更合适? I have arrived home safely after a pleasant journey. Im writing this letter to say thank you for your tender care. * 2. 感谢你们一家对我寄宿期间的悉心照顾; -- I want to thank you and your family again for letting me stay and taking care of me. ---Looking back on the past few weeks we spent together, I really want to convey my deep gratitude for your tender care through this letter to you and your family. * 3. 今年暑假来北京游览吧，我来提供食宿。 ---Id like to invite you to come to Beijing this summer vacation. Id like to provide you meals and place to rest. 怎样表达更通俗呢？ ----If you are free this summer vacation, I