竞争与合作四级英语作文选集及专业教师点评.ppt

Competition and Cooperation 审题步骤 1. 在生活中，我们到处都能见到竞争。 第一段的关键词是“到处都能见到竞争”，用列举法稍作展开，点到为止。 2. 有时竞争与合作是并存的。 第二段重点论述两者之间的关系，用一个具体事例来论证两者是如何并存的后，再列举几个同样的事例补充说明，会使得论证充分翔实些。 3. 我们要以正确的态度对待竞争与合作。 第三段关键词在“态度”上。可以使用观点陈述法；也可以使用辩证法来说明不同的态度会带来的不同影响。 本次作文的总体印象 多数同学都能做到基本切题和切题； 能运用所学句型结构和高频词汇表达思想； 多数同学能做到卷面整洁，书写较工整； 少数同学未能按照写作提纲展开段落； 部分同学存在语言表达不够简洁或表达不清楚的问题； 段与段之间的过渡问题、句和句之间的连贯性问题； 拼写问题: competition Sample for Paragraph 1 Competition exists in widely varied activities. Players of the same football team compete for slots on the team. In a workplace, colleagues compete for higher positions. And also in business, firms become rivals for more consumers and a bigger markets share. As for students, we compete in the studies for the opportunities to join in a society. （运用列举法简要说明竞争无处不在） (13分)（13级生科——张蒙） Sample 2 for Paragraph 1 Competition is a common phenomenon in our social life. we compete when we play games, we try to do better than others in study, and our job, fame, wealth and something else all involve competition. Consequently, we can say that, to some extent, competition is one of the driving forces of the development of the society. (12分) （13级物理——朱朝阳） Sample 1 for Paragraph 2 ……For example, a film is released successfully as a result of the willing cooperative efforts of many workers. But different films compete against each other for higher profits at the “box office”(票房). Actually, there are a lot of phenomenon paralleling shooting a movie in these respects such as the debate and the production of goods.（举例贴切、新颖） (13分)（13级历史——付梅颦） Sample 2 for Paragraph 2 Although the “law of the jungle” which makes many people become out of work seems to be pretty cutthroat. However, cooperation is also wildly distributed in the market and our daily life. Actually, they even rely on each other to reach a balance, because if employers always prefer to reflect on how could they beat their rivals rather than meet and satisfy the demands of the consumers, no one would be the winner at last.