警醒!雅思考官作文是如何被中国学生评成5分的？.docx

警醒！雅思考官作文是如何被中国学生评成5分的？摘要：考官作文被中国学生评成5分反应出一个现实，国内学生作文分数不高，不仅是英文水平低的问题，其实考生还犯了议论文写作方面的方向性错误，错误已经严重到分不清美丑的地步了。我在豆瓣做了一个作文评价活动，如我所料，许多学生在不知情的情况下，给雅思考官的作文评分并不高，大多给出了5或5.5的分数。统计如下：有2位烤鸭选择了A，一位是在澳华人，雅思连着几次平稳作文7+分，一位的习作我给出了好评，还有一位同学看出是好作文后，查出来源，并指摘我没有注明出处云云，现在真像大白。所以，在参与答题的那么多烤鸭中，只有3位认为考官文章是好作文。还有一位考生选择了C，认为该文下等。其余的学生都选择了B，认为该文中等。这同我之前预料的相一致，国内学生作文分数不高，不仅是英文水平低的问题，其实还犯了议论文写作方面的方向性错误，错误已经严重到分不清美丑的地步了。现在分析一下这篇文章题目：Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.?People have different views about the funding of creative artists. While some people disagree with the idea of government support for artists, I believe that money for art projects should come from both governments and other sources.第一句：背景句，起引入话题的作用。第二句：首先用让步状语从句改写题目，在主句中表明了自己的观点。并不是说用了while…I believe…之类议论文常用的词汇就成了模板，这是议论文的常用表达法。Some art projects definitely require help from the state. In theUK, there are many works of art in public spaces, such as streets or squares in city centres. In Liverpool, for example, there are several new statues and sculptures in the docks area of the city, which has been redeveloped recently. These artworks represent culture, heritage and history. They serve to educate people about the city, and act as landmarks or talking points for visitors and tourists. Governments and local councils should pay creative artists to produce this kind of art, because without their funding our cities would be much less interesting and attractive.第一句：本段的中心句，在议论文写作中，一个段落只能有一个中心句，且段内的所有论述都是为证明中心句而服务的，不能与中心句产生冲突。我个人在写作时，段内让步句都不会写的。本段采用的论证方法是“摆事实，讲道理”，也可以说是事实论证和道理论证。从“In the UK”开始到“which has been redeveloped recently”是事实论证；其余部分是道理论证。这种论证方法是比较难的，在摆事实的时候，不能出现多余信息，就本文来讲，每一句都要出现与art projects相关的词汇，且不能出现其他无关信息。在讲道理的时候，最终落脚点必须是art projects对政府的好处，这样才能得出政府要买单的结论。有些烤鸭可能会问，你说的那些什么“摆事实，讲道理”中学语文老师也讲过，可我考的是雅思，不是语文。其实，不管是中文也好，英文也罢，只要文体是议论