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2013版《写作160篇》已经连续7年命中考研英语写作大小作文 （一） 作文修改 2011.09.30 商业捕鱼——玉米王子作文 ①The two pictures show us a distinctly contrast between fishing ships and fish resources. ②In 批注 [微软用户1]: ①句中 1990, there was only one ship in the sea, leisurely and freely, with abundant fish beneath.③ distinctly 应改为distinct, adj. While in 1995, the sea was saturated with fishing ships, as busy as a bee, hunting the only 修饰名词contrast remaining fish. ④From the pictures we can see there have been substantial reduction in fish 批注 [微软用户2]: ②句中这 resources accompanied by a mounting number of ships pursuing hunting fish. 部分语序有些问题，修饰的 对象不太明确的。可以调整 ①It is an obvous that it is the ever-increasing fishing industry that has brought this worrisome 为with abundant fish phenomenon about. ②As a consequence of improved fishing technology and application of beneath, fishing leisurely satellite and sonar it brings, which were not available 50 years ago, the number of hunted fish has and freely. been outstandingly increased, this means that a higher proportion of what is in the sea is being caught, with a consequent decreased diversity of sea resources. ③Add to the severity of this 批注 [微软用户3]: ④句中 problem is people’s declining awareness of protecting marine life. ④They are becoming have 应该改为ha