雅思作文修改版.docx

TR6.0 Answer all parts of the task5addresses the task only partially; the format may be inappropriate in placesPresent?a clear position throughout the task6presents a relevant position although the conclusions may become unclear or repetitiveExtend and support main ideas7presents, extends and supports main ideas, but there may be a tendency to overgeneralise and/or supporting ideas may lack focusCC5.5Paragraph6uses paragraphing, but not always logicallyLogical organization of essay6arranges information and ideas coherently and there is a clear overall progressionCohesive devices5makes inadequate, inaccurate or over-use of cohesive devices LR7.0 Range7uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision Accuracy7may produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formationGRA7.0 Grammatical Range7uses a variety of complex structures Accuracy of grammar7has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors Score（四项所得分）25.5/6.5Other Items Affecting Score （扣分项）Under lengthxNo. of words285Penalty0.0Off-topicxMemorized——Illegible——Overall Band Score (最终分数)6.5 = 6.5 – 0.0老师的批改使用了word的备注, 请务必用PC端看, 请勿使用预览/手机/平板.bandrangebandrange9[35-36]4[15-17)8.5[33-35)3.5[13-15)8[31-33)3[11-13)7.5[29-31)2.5[9-11)7[27-29)2[7-9)6.5[25-27)1.5[5-7)6[23-25)1[3-5)5.5[21-23)0.5[1-3)5[19-21)0[0-1)4.5[17-19)————Question:Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Others believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible.What do you think are the advantages of attending school from a young age?Analysis:Question typeDiscussionTopicSome people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Others believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible.Real writing tasksDiscuss why some people believe that children should be allowed to st