2011东城二模作文分析.ppt

第四部分 书面表达（共两节，35分） 第一节 情景作文（20分） 假设你是北京某国际学校的学生会主席李华。校学生会准备在今年暑假组织一次“帮扶农民工子弟”的志愿者活动。请你根据以下表格中的提示，用英文写一份活动通知。 注意： 1．活动通知开头和结尾已为你写好。 2．词数不少于60。 提示词：migrant worker农民工 北京市东城区2010—2011学年第二学期高三综合练习（二） 英 语 试 题 活动时间 7月15日—8月5日 活动形式 分组活动 活动对象 农民工子弟 活动内容 游览北京风景名胜……、参观不同的博物馆……学电脑……、学英语…… 存在问题： 1.时态 does \ will do 2.分组： 我们被分组; will be divided into several groups 3.既然分组就要交代清楚每一组都干什么了。 Group One will show the children around Beijing. Group Two will take the children to (visit)different museums Group Three will teach the children how to use the computer Group Four will (also) help them to learn English as well 再有：你是志愿者，带领the children of migrant worker 去游 览、去参观、学电脑、学英语，而不是你自己去做这些事。 For example: we’ll show them around the places of interest, such as— 4.表达有误： 1).7月15日—8月5日 开始: will start / begin from July 15 to August 5 will start / begin on July 15 and end on August 5 will start / begin during July 15 --- August 5 2).学电脑：learn how to use the computer 3).带领----游览、参观 show sb around--- take sb. to a place \ visit a place 5.缺少细节： Group One will show the children around Beijing. They will visit different places such as Hutongs, the Great Wall, the Forbidden City and so on, which will help them learn about the history and culture. Group Two will take the children to different museums in order to enrich their knowledge and broaden their horizon. Group Three will teach the children how to use the computer to search the information on the Internet . Group Four will (also) help them to learn English as well to communite with foreigners. 6.过渡句运用不恰当： The activity will start on July 15 and end on August 5. The team members will be divided into several groups. Each will perform a different task. Notice A volunteer team will be organized to help the children of migrant workers. The activity will start on July 15 and end on Au