英语六级写作-汶川.doc

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled Hand in Hand We Stand. You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below in Chinese： 1. 汶川地震是中国遭受的一次大灾难；2. 一方有难，八方支援，人们纷纷行动起来共同抗震救灾；3. 我们能做些什么。 ①审题及布局。此写作题是一篇提纲式作文。在布局上，按照提纲的要求展开写作即可。第一段指出地震发生的时间、地点和灾情；第二段讲述全国人民对四川的捐助情况；第三段说明自己作为学生能为灾区做些什么。②语言。作为一篇记叙文，语言表达要准确生动，句式要多样，词汇要丰富，这样可以增添文采。On May 12, 2008, an 8.0-magnitude earthquake struck Sichuan. Thousands of people lost their lives and even more people were left homeless. But, hand in hand, the Chinese people faced this disaster with compassion and courage. People across China offered to make donations energetically. Relief materials and funds were continuously pouring into quake hit areas. What’s more, several rescue teams and medical professionals, at home and abroad, was sent to the earthquake stricken areas to search and rescue the survivals. As far as we students are concerned, we should provide our helping hands for the earthquake stricken compatriots. We can donate our spare money to the suffering people who are in urgent need of food and medicine. Blood donation is also of vital significance for those injured people. Students who are equipped with professional skills can volunteer to the earthquake stricken areas to rescue more lives. Besides, our spirit support and sincere prayers can help the broken hearts overcome the temporary disaster.第一段开门见山，指出地震发生的时间和地点。其中，hand in hand “手挽手”、face this disaster with compassion and courage“用热情和勇气面对灾难”属于高分表达，为文章增色不少。第二段直接说明全国人民对灾区的捐助情况。Whats more的使用使文章层次分明，结构清晰。make donations“捐赠”、pour into“涌入”这些都是高分表达。第三段阐述自己作为学生能为灾区做点什么。Besides进一步说明，支持不光包括物质方面，还包括精神方面。As far as one is concerned是表达自己观点时的常用句型；in urgent need of “急切需要”；be equipped with“具备”均为高分表达