商务写作2_征求意见.pdf

Email Tune-up 02: Asking for comments Original Email Subject : Please review this document Dear Emily, I should be glad if you review the attached document . Please can you let me know if you have any inputs, comments and concerns? I look forward to hearing from you. If I don’t receive your feedback by 5:00pm next Wednesday, I will deem that yu are OK with the content of the attached document . Thank you very much for your attention! Yours sincerely, Dora Revised Email Subject : Document for review Dear Emily, I should be glad if you could review the attached document. Can you please let me know if you have any comments? I would like to receive your feedback by 5:00pm next Wednesday, so that I can make any changes you feel are necessary . Thank you very much for your attention. I look forward to hearing from you. Regards, Sandra © 2008 All rights reserved: businessenglishpod .com 1 ET 0 2 – Ema il T une -up Transcript All right, we already know a little bit about the background of this short email. This is an internal company memo. Sandra is contacting her colleague Emily to ask her to read and review a document, which she has attached to the email as a separate file. Sandra wants the language to sound friendly, but she also wants to keep the language direct and professional. Let’s first look at issues of mechanics: formatting, punctuation and grammar. I think the formatting of this email needs a couple of changes. In the first paragraph we have a phrase, I look forward to hearing from you, which normally appears in the conclusion of a business letter. So I’m going to cut this out and move it down to the end of the third paragraph and make it the last sentence of the email. So we now have : Thank you very much for your attention. I look forward to hearing from you, which is a very go