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汉译英 海伦·斯诺伦认为，她的一生与延安有着特殊的感情。她把延安描写成是一颗镶嵌在群山和城墙环抱之中的宝石，延安就像中国文明的哨兵。60年之后，当她回顾当年在延安的时光时，海伦这样写道：“时至今日，人们依然感到奇怪，一个年轻的美国女青年，居然成为整个延安历史的一部分。我写作的《续西行漫记》，是第一部关于延安的著作，而且在后来的许多年里，一直是唯一的一部”。 Helen Snow considered that her whole life was specially connected to Yan’an, a city, as she said, that glitters like a jewel embedded in the embrace of those mountains and ramparts or rather stands like a soldier guarding China’s civilization. After 60 years, looking back on those days when she lived here（这里可以用的更简洁些我觉得可以换成in Yan’an,这样更顺）, she wrote: “up to now, people are still wondering why a young woman from America should take her stand in the history of Yan’an.（参考译文中的be a part of Yan’an’s history觉得更加切合， Inside Red China is a work, and has been for many years the only work that is about Yan’an.” Helen Snow felt a special connection with Yan and described Yan’an （译者似乎忘记了在英文中代词的作用，这里可以直接用it）as set like a gem inside its wall and crown of hills, ( 群山用crown来比喻，似有不妥，毕竟皇冠和群山没有什么相似之处)adding that Yan’an stood sentinal（延安不仅过去是中国文明的哨兵，以后将来也是，时态拿捏不准） for civilization. （中国文明的哨兵，译文直接将定语中国文明去掉，怕是不妥） Nearly（原文说的是60年之后，译文却加上了nearly，有不忠之嫌） 60 years later, looking back her time（time用的有些模糊，不如days更具体） in Yan’an, she recalled, “It seems strange now that a young American woman should have become a part of Yan’an story. My book, Inside Red China was the first on Yan’an, for many years the only one.” 海伦笔下的延安，特指“延安时期”的延安，也就是说，从长征结束的1936年起，到延安成为中国共产党的所在地，再到1945年第二次世界大战结束的这一段历史时期。这个阶段的时代精神，在她的笔下是“斯巴达式的自我牺牲、基层民主、纯粹又纯洁的革命目标、革命精神和灵魂”。而这些时代特征，正是当年延安精神的体现。 What Helen wrote about Yan’an especially means the one in the “Yan’an period”, that is, from 1936 when the Long March had ended to the day when China’s Communist Party called it home and then to 1945 when the World War II stopped. And this period featured such a spirit as she depicted: “to perform basic democracy and to sacrifice like Spartans with pure revolutionary aim, spirit and soul.” The Yan’an story Helen spoke of was of the classical “Yan’an period” which las