dutbsrq雅思_考试写作语句修饰方面五个小窍门.doc

^ | You have to believe, there is a way. The ancients said: the kingdom of heaven is trying to enter. Only when the reluctant step by step to go to it s time, must be managed to get one step down, only have struggled to achieve it. -- Guo Ge Tech 雅思考试写作语句修饰方面五个小窍门 雅思考试写作语句的修饰方面给大家五个小窍门： 一、避免使用语意弱的“be”动词。 　　1、把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。例如： 　　Weak: The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab. Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (转换为前置定语) 　　Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green. (转换为并列结构作后置定语) 　　2、将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词。例如： 　　1) Weak: The team members are good players. 　　Revision: The team members play well. 　　2) Weak: One workers plan is the elimination of tardiness. 　　Revision: One workers plan eliminates tardiness. 　　3、在以“here”或“there”开头的句子中，把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语。例如： 　　1) Weak: There is no opportunity for promotion. 　　Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists. 　　2) Weak: Here are the books you ordered. 　　Revision: The books you ordered have arrived. 　　二、多用语意具体的动词，保持句意简洁明了。例如： 　　1、Poor: My supervisor went past my desk. 　　Better: My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk. 　　2、Poor: She is a careful shopper. 　　Better: She compares prices and quality. 　　三、尽量运用主动语态。例如： 　　1、Weak: The organization has been supported by charity. 　　Better: Charity has supported the organization. 　　2、Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate. 　　Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate. 　　四、防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语。例如： 　　1、Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk. 　　Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk. 　　2、Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations. 　　Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation. 　　3、Redundant: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire. 　　Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire. 　　4、Redundant: My sister and I bou