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Edited: Wi-Fi, Bluetooth and ZigBee work at the similar RF frequencies, and their applications sometimes overlap (Sager and Clive, 2006). Therefore, in the current study we chose five main factors of greenhouse networks to compare: cost, data rate, number of nodes, current consumption and battery life. * Flowing direction (Unedited) Although further studies are needed to validate … our approach … could be used as a screen means for … * Analysis Problem: The direction from emphasizing the achievement to admitting a problem should be followed. * Edited Our approach…could be used as a screen means for ... Further studies, however, may be needed to validate … * Use transitional words to promote logic flow Also, and, again, further, furthermore First, then, second, next, lastly Soon, after, previously, meanwhile But, yet, still, instead, In short, in other words, Similarly, consequently, accordingly * 2. Coherence Parallelism Cause/effect Modifier position Connection * 2.1 Parallelism (verb) (Incorrect) She swims, plays basketball, and was running bicycles. (Correct) She swims, plays basketball, and runs bicycles. * 2.2 Parallelism (subject) (Incorrect) The ignition was tested, an examination of the belts was carried out, and the levels of the lubricants were checked. * Correction The ignition was tested, the belts were examined, and the lubricant levels were checked. * 2.2 Cause/effect Neurons … are situated adjacent to …the third ventricle, for they can directly respond to peripheral signals … Problem: Does the location cause the direct response or vise versa? * Edited Neurons … are situated adjacent to…the third ventricle, so they can directly respond to peripheral signals … * 2.3 Modifier position (unedited) These results suggest that expression of NPY in the hypothalamus has a type-dependent pattern in the domestic chicken. * Edited These results suggest the expression of NPY in the hypothalamus in domestic chickens has a type-dependent patter