3月3日周测作文讲评-精选文档.ppt

基础写作： 假如你是校报记者，请根据下面的要点，用英语写一篇短文，报道你校举办的第32届校运动会。 ［写作内容］ —————————————— ————————————————————— ————————————————— ① ——————————————————— —————————————————— ② ———————————————————————— ——————————— ③ ——————————————————— ④ ———————————————————————— ⑤ 时间 上周五，周六 地点 校运动场 参赛情况 全校36支队，320多位选手 比赛结果 15人打破上届校运会纪录；其中，高中年级的一名运动员一人打破了三项纪录。 其他 广播组收到报道稿1000余篇 作用 激发了同学们的团队合作精神，培养拼搏精神 ———————— 存在问题 1. 本文是报道 ，时态应该用过去式。 2. 语言表达上出错。 1.上周五,周六，你校在运动场举办了校运动会。 Last Friday and Saturday, our school held a sports meeting on the playground. 报道常用被动语态: A wonderful sports meeting was held on our school playground last Friday and Saturday. 此处不用介词, 因为有last 2.全校36支队，320多位选手; 15人打破上届校运会纪录 More tnan 320 athletes from 36 teams took part in the events, among whom 15 athletes broke the school records set last year. 此处可用competed in 此处是非限制性定语丛句。 此处很多同学用了break up/down 3. 高中年级的一名运动员一人打破了三项纪录。 An athlete from Grade Three broke three records alone. It’s amazing that an athlete from Grade Three broke three records alone. 此处使用主语丛句，使内容更充实，句式更多样。 4. 广播组收到报道稿1000余篇 广播组： the broadcasting team The broadcasting team received over 1,000 reports written by students. 此处可用contributed做reports的后置定语。 5. 激发了同学们的团队合作精神，培养拼搏精神 The sports meeting highly inspired the team-work spririt of the students and developed their fighting spirit. What pleased us most is that the sports meeting highly inspired the team-work spririt of the students as well as developed their fighting spirit. 此处使用主语从句和表语从句，使句子更多样化。 A wonderful sports meeting was held on our school playground last Friday and Saturday. More tnan 320 athletes from 36 teams took part in the events, among whom 15 athletes broke the school records set last year. It’s amazing that an athlete from Grade Three broke three records alone. In addition to that, the broadcasting team received over 1,000 reports contributed by students. What pleased us most is that the sports meeting highly inspired the team-work spririt of the stude