第五课语法与文体错误分析.pptx

Scientific Paper Writing;;I. Comma Splice (逗号叠加);Correct: (1) … vacuum; it is … (2) … entertaining, for they are… Tips: Comma can not be used between two complete sentences. If the contents of the two sentences are connected, we may use semicolon“;” Or we use linking words.;II. Choppy Style(文体紊乱);;Correct one: We have established a communications Systems (CS) Planning Team which includes …division. We hold regular meetings to assess state-of-the-art communications equipment and to discuss how new products…. At these meetings, the user representatives describe their other future needs and work out their requirements for the new communication network.;Exercise: Electric cars must be able to meet the same safety standards that gasoline cars must meet as set up by the Department of Transportation. These standards are derived from an established crash test. In the crash test, the car is propelled against a solid wall at 30 mph. The data obtained from the crash test ; are analyzed for fuel spillage, fuel system integrity, windshield retention(挡风玻璃残留), and zone intrusion. Sample 2: The proposed system is required to alleviate(减轻) the increase in demand by using the microcomputer as a stand-alone entry system with all the necessary graphics and software capabilities to remove the burden of ;Data entry from the present system CADDS. Analysis: This is a long inexplicable?sentence. Topic sentence:要求拟建的系统能缓和不得不增加的信息量。 Development：1.方法：去除现有系统CADDS的数据入口负担而达到要求。2. 设备：把微机作为独立入口系统来;完成。这种微机具有为完成这概念所要求的所有图表以及软件能力。 修改方法： Use both long and short sentences To explain the topic by the way of general-to-specific Use cohesive devices to link two related sentences;Correct one:;III. Excessive Use of the Passive Voice;2. The contents of sentence in passive should be consistent with the fact. e.g. （1）In industry metals are often used in the form of alloys. （√） （2）From these data it is seen that remote batch processing can provide batch processing at remote locations.(远程成批程序能够把成批处理发