读后续写之动作描写 学案答案(教师版)2023届高三英语写作专项.pdfVIP

志不强者智不达，言不信者行不果。——墨翟

读后续写之动作描写

简单有效的六个微技能

基础技能：1.运用具体动词替代笼统动词

2.运用恰当短语替代普通动词

中阶技能：3.增加修饰成分

4.构造动作链

高阶技能：5.多角度描述肢体动作

6.构造动作面

如何使动作描写更饱满？

感知:结合语境,如何优化表达？

1.Becauseofhislies,shelookedathim.

Becauseofhislies,sheglaredathim.

2Withonlytwentysecondsleft,Irantotheline.

Withonlytwentysecondsleft,Irush/dashedtotheline.

3.Withonlytwominutesleft,heatehismeal.

Withonlytwominutesleft.Heswalloweduphismeal.

Sheheardhermotherwhisperedasshetiptoeddownthehall,

Skill1：ChooseAccurateVerbs用精准动词代替笼统动词

generalwords（笼统词）concretewords(具体词）

walktiptoe(蹑手蹑脚地走)

rundash/rush(猛冲)

lookglance(瞥见)glare(怒视)stare(凝视)

say/talkchat(闲聊)whisper(耳语)

cryweep/sob（啜泣)

eatbite(咬)chew（咀嚼)swallow(吞下)

志不强者智不达，言不信者行不果。——墨翟

Skill2：Chooseproperphrases用恰当短语代替普通动词

start/begingetdowntodoing

decidemakeuponesmind

cryburstintotears

rememberkeepinmind

tiredwornout

seecatchsightof

attractappealto

Skill3.加介词短语/副词修饰动作

ThefiercewolfstaredatMacwithits__sharp/bloody/frightening/scary/terrible______teeth.

__________Immediately/Instantly/Hurriedly/Breathlessly______(adv),hejumpedoffthebicycleanddashedintothe

car.

Asthehungrywolfwasalmostreachinghim,Mac’seyeswerewideopen____infear/panic/horror/shock_.

(in/with+名词)

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