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设计类

写作话题：假设你是陈芳，你的好友王敏是新华中学的学生，下个月将去美国的姐妹校交流访问。王敏想拍摄一个短片，向英国的同学和老师介绍自己的学校。她通过邮件向你征求意见。写一封回信，内容包括：

短片的主题以及与之匹配的主要内容；

你选择这些内容的理由。（徐汇2020一模）

一、框架梳理

交代背景

好友之间的信件，注意语气不需要太正式，可以用I’dliketooffer…，不需要用Iamwritingto…；还需要注意写作对象，不能用wordcamethat…这个句型，hearingthat也最好不要用，因为这是好友之间的私人通信，不是听别人说。

I’mgladtohearfromyou,congratulatingyouontheopportunitytopayavisittothesisterschoolinBritain.Iseeyouarehesitatingoverwhattointroduceaboutyourschool.I’dliketooffermyadviceonthetopic.

Longtimenosee.How’severythinggoing?I’vereceivedyourletterandI’mgladthatyou’regoingtoBritainasanexchangestudentnextmonth.Iamgladyoutrustmeandturntomeforadviceonthevideoyouplantoshoot,whichisintendedtointroduceandrecommendyourschooltoforeignstudentsandteachers.

Hopeeverythinggoeswellwithyou.CongratulateyouonyourbeingelectedasastudentrepresentativetovisitthesisterschoolinBritain.I’malsohappythatyouaskmehowtoprepareashortvlogforthem.

I’msoexcitedtohearfromyou.HowgreatitisthatyouhavethisopportunitytogotoBritainasanexchangestudent!Personallyspeaking,Ithinkyoucanshareyourschool’suniqueeducationalphilosophy.

I’mgladatthenewsofyourtriptothesisterschoolinBritain.Learningthatyouwanttoshootashortvideoandintroduceyourschool—XinHuaMiddleSchooltoyourclassmatesandteachersintheUK,Ican’twaittosharewithyoumyideas.

HavingreceivedyourmailthatyouwillgotoEnglandforanexchangevisitandwouldliketomakeavideotointroduceyourschooltothestudentsandteachersthere,Icanhardlywaittoexpressmyideas.

I’mgladtoknowfromyouremailthatyouaregoingtothesisterschoolinBritainforanexchangevisit,andIameagertosharewithyoumyideasonyourshortfilmabouttheintroductionofyourschool—XinhuaMiddleSchool.

引出短片主题和主要内容

（一）以I作主语：

IfIwereyou,I’dliketochoose…a