新时代核心英语教程写作2教学课件U18 Avoiding wordiness.pptx

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18UNITAvoidingwordinessAvoidingwordiness

conciseness简洁expletiveconstruction虚词结构passiveconstruction被动结构KeyTermsredundancy赘语wordiness冗词赘句

MainContentsEliminatingunneededwordsEliminatingunnecessaryrepetitionEliminatingwordystructures

2.RecognizingandavoidingemptywordsorphrasesDifficultPoints1.Decidingwhenusingthepassivevoiceisunnecessary

Wordinessrefertotheuseofmorewordsthannecessarytoexpressameaningcorrectlyandclearly.Whatiswordiness?

Comparethefollowingthreesentences:Brief:Themarketdropped.Concise:Thestockmarketfell2352pointstoday,thesharpestdeclinesince1987.Wordy:BythetimetradingstoppedonWallStreet,thestockmarkethadfallendown2352points,whichwassignificantbecauseitwasthesharpestdeclinesinceasimilardropin1987.

Judgewhetherthefollowingsentencesareconciseorwordy.Activity11.Iappliedforthejob.Concise

Judgewhetherthefollowingsentencesareconciseorwordy.Activity12.Thedirectorisworriedaboutpossibleproblems.Theseproblemsmayincludeshortageofpersonnel,shortageoftimeforpreparation,andshortageofenoughfundsforoperation.Wordy

Judgewhetherthefollowingsentencesareconciseorwordy.Activity13.Thereisamanlookingoutofthewindow.Wordy

Judgewhetherthefollowingsentencesareconciseorwordy.Activity14.One’sfamilyandsociallifecaninfluencehisorherbehaviorinsociety.Concise

Judgewhetherthefollowingsentencesareconciseorwordy.Activity15.At12o’clockmidnight,Cinderella’sbeautifulcoachturnedbacktoapumpkin.Wordy

EliminatingwordystructuresEliminatingwordystructures

Wordystructures,suchasexpletiveconstructionsandpassiveconstructions,canmakewritingabstractandboring.Eliminatingwordystructures

Anexpletivereferstoawordthatfillsaspaceinasentencewithoutaddingtothemeaning.Reviseunnecessaryexpletiveconstructions

Expletiveconstruction